(the winning title)
When granny was a little kid,
She ate huge bars of candy.
Now look! She’s in this horrid state,
Life’s no more fine and dandy!
We cannot sell her off now
‘Cause she cannot even talk,
When we take her for interviews
She’s like a gaping gawk.
The moral of the story,
Is spelt out loud and clearly,
It is a fact applicable
To every boy and girlie…
Grow old and gray with creaky joints
And wrinkled in the bum….
BUT
Don’t kill us with unsightly sights
Of GRINNING TOOTHLESS GUMS!
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:-) nice peace of writing ..... title may be "sweet granny" .. :-))
yeah, totally peaceful "peace" of writing. except for the kicks of course.
hmmm...title eh?
cj will have to comply.
if i give u a title u have to promise to marry me when u grow ur wisdom molars. ;-)
P.S. I'm not intelligent.
oh, and by the way nic, congrats. ur a celebrity in blogsphere. u've been featured on the POetisphere list of 100 Blogging poets. yay!!!!!!
GRRRRREEEEEEAT GOING!!! :-)
1. Grinny granny (sort of obvious, but i guess i havent started thinking yet)
2.HOw about Colgate-G, you might get sponsored by them too!!
or 3. Hey Granny,Say cheese!!
hee hee
ill think a bit more ... i think i need to ..
What about 'Speachless' Happy New Year
"Your teeth are OK but yer gums have gotta go!"
How about 'flew away smile' but I'm not the best at titles. Your new picture looks very nice by the way!
How about:
No Toothbrush for Granny!
'granny's baby smile'
'toothless killer'
'chew on Nothin'
great work . let us know which u selected.
"MALADY-REMEDY"
Hey Nicole
Thanks for dropping in at my blog. The poem generated much debate at a writers' forum and now I've posted my response to the same on my blog. Maybe you'd like to read it. :-)
I really liked this jab at your teethless Granny! :-) Wonderful!
Cheers
Dan
For Nicole, in penence for my darker moments
Body Language
Jonathan Robert O’tee
With the grumps
Had just reached the age
Of two years and two months
When he realised the power
Of the scream and the yell
A subject he’d studied
And thought he knew well
Aware that mere mortals,
Quake at his call
Would open the hatches
And give it his all
When tiresome folk
Tried to feed
Or to clothe
His riotous shriek
Would make blood run cold
The offender might coax
And coo in his ear
But relenting was not
A thing he could bare
Jonathan Robert
got worse for a while
Until he discovered
The power of the smile.
you people are inspiring me to write something .... may GOD save this world
Blogger Buddies, I return to Bombay tomorrow and college will resume for me. I'm really so kicked at the enthusiasm of you guys! Its going to be hard to choose...will give everyone a little more time to brainstorm and I'll let you know the winner in a bit (ie. whenever I find a computer) Keep writing till then...hope to have lots to read when I next visit your blogs!
Amit-> "Piece". Sorry, had to! And thank you.
Shubho-> MEOW! SMARTYPANTS
As for marrying you...promise to write me a love poem every day of my life and I'll marry you tomorrow.
PS. Yes you are!
Shubho-> Yay! Is it a big deal?
Chamki-> Enthu cutlet! Keep brainstroming.
Sue-> May it be a great one for you too.
CJ-> Ouch!
Russel-> "Flew away Smile"...there's an idea in that itself. Perhaps the beginning of a childrens story....Sue might want to explore that. She's good at that sort of thing.
Jamie-> Naughty gran!
Nita-> Hi, Welcome...hope you like my stuff. And please please come again! (At least to check the winner) :)
Shubho-> You again. Enthu Cutlet(2)
Dan Husain-> Your poem was indeed very very good. Btw, I think its ultra-cool that you're into acting.
Sue-> You deserve a great big bear hug. Thank you so much for that. The poem is simply wonderful, clever and with a great message.
Amit-> Hope you do. All the brainstroming has created quite a storm on here hasn't it?
granny and the chocolate factory sounds soo good! i loved it!
how come i didnt think of it?!?
good going finnegan..
i knew i would have a lot of competition here!
@ Nicole
My fingers are even faster than my brain
love poems....?...no problem...just promise to write me one funny poem everyday...
So, for the titles....
GRANNY !!!!!!
OH! GRANNY
NO! GRANNY
GRANNY'S AGED MILK TEETH
OLD GRANNY'S MILK TEETH
GRANNY AND THE TOOTH GERMS
DON'T BE GREEDY, GRANNY!
GRANNY'S ECLECTICAL TASTE BUDS
GREEDY GRANNY
GLUTTONOUS GRANNY
...and my personal favourite....
GRANNIES BEWARE!!!!
...those were the worst I could dish out!!!
Hey
OVERWHELMED! That's how I feel when I see the awesome response of all you people! THANKS A LOT for making it SO HARD to choose.
And the winner is FINNEGAN
(He put some really smart ideas out there) CONGRATULATIONS!
...And thanks again to all of you.
Ho ho ho!
Back at college then? Have a great term. And don't eat too many smarties...
Happy 2006!
XXX
Hi Nicole.. Stopped by your blog 'coz finding other Braganzas always thrills me.. Nice poem... You write well.. Will keep track of posts on your blog henceforth :-)
Dropped in here after a long time...
But must say nothing has changed over here..
The same classy stuff that we are so addicted to, served up with that distinct verve.
You rock, young lady!!!
Roger-> Yep, and I hope its a good year ahead for you too.
Nessa-> Will check out your blog sometime soon. And hey, hope to see you around here more often.
Sameer-> Great to have you back.
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